135So after much thinking of weather I should keep writing this story, I read it again and realize that some scenes didn't make sense, and some scenes aren't like how I picture them, so after much thinking and weighing the pros/cons I decided to reboot this story, adding more scenes, removing some scenes, more details and sculpting it on how I want it to be, the easiest thing about this is I don't need to start from scratch as I have the chapters to work on, and I planned into trying to write the next chapter by myself, although I would still need a Co-author or two to help me, I'm always looking for feedback and would welcome on what scenes to fix or change, you just tell me and how would you like the scene or chapter change.
The changes I'm going to make are these things.
1. Ben's attitude, and personality (both post-war and Pre-war) will change as I found him too aggressive when talking to Nick, sure he suffers from mild ptsd from the war but he isn't easily enrage, he's like Punisher but only when he's calm he is still very scary.
2. Adam's age is going to be changed rather than be a 13 yr old bunny He is going to be either 8 or 10 as now he's more like a teen than a kid.
3. There's going to be a much more detail and in depth retake on chapter 1.
4. Leo and Mangle didn't die and will serve as supporting characters when the Asylum chapter comes up.
Another Annocument is I plan to do a spin off call Our War, the title says it all it's a Story all based on the Pangean War it will cover more battles, adding more lore, and show some parts from the Humanist Republic pov such as them launching failed operations in trying to invade parts of Zootopia such as Sahara, Meadow Lands, and Outback Island (it will have a Gallipoli feeling to it) only to be pushed back from heavy defenses and suffering thousands of casualties, the weird thing is I have the name of the chapters already and how there going to be.
Chapter 1: They Will Not Pass: Shows on how the Commwealth Fedration Military hold the line and make sure the HR don't break thru, it's based on the Measue Argonne Offensive, and Storm of Steel from BF1
Chapter 2: In the Name of The Republic!: Shows the only victory the HR had when launching man offensive that drives back the CF only to run out of resources and ammunition and exhausting all their manpower, they are pushed back with heavy losses. Based on the Brusilov Offensive and Battle of Tannenberg
Chapter 3: Turning the Tide: The HR launch a suicidal operation in trying to land troops using old dreadnoughts and row boats on the Zootopia mainland but are greeted with heavy defenses like CFM MGs, Artillery, and Helicopters and also a failed air raid using WW1 era planes and bombers to try and hit Bunnyburrow only to be met with Anti-air chainguns and Fighter jets and attack helicopters. Based on the Gallipoli Campaign and the London Air Raids of ww1
Chapter 4: End of The World: Covers the most brutal battles of the Pangean War, battles such as Battle of Kirkland, Battle of Gallen, and the Clash of Machines as old tanks try to fight modern tanks, this will show the carnage, the deaths, the brutality of war, based on The Battle of Passchendaele, Battle of the Somme, and the Battle of Kurs
Rather than glorifying war, this spin off will show the brutality of war and just how brutal the conflict was, and yes the titles of the chapter are based off the DLCs of BF1, what can I say, I just love that game.
