for Mirrored Souls5/22/2014 c7 
11Kibaikasu
For the love of god, MOAR!
I love this story so much, please, I beg you, find a way to continue it! See if you can work something out with your co-author, even if it means getting permission to continue solo. This story is too good to just leave unfinished... T_T
11KibaikasuFor the love of god, MOAR!
I love this story so much, please, I beg you, find a way to continue it! See if you can work something out with your co-author, even if it means getting permission to continue solo. This story is too good to just leave unfinished... T_T
4/9/2013 c1 LuciferHynix
Very good i love the way you present the characters feelings. I like this take on how keiichi feels. it makes sense for him to be depressed. I look foward to more.
Very good i love the way you present the characters feelings. I like this take on how keiichi feels. it makes sense for him to be depressed. I look foward to more.
3/27/2013 c7 2CyberSpider
Hello to both authors,
I had been passing over this story for a while, and now I have finally read it. Other than a few mistakes (Urd being a 'he' - Fated, just after she makes the tea offer to Belldandy, and a few spelling errors), I have very much enjoyed the story. Sorry to find that you killed Megumi even before the story starts (hopefully she returns as a forgiving and healing spirit for Keii and family later), but otherwise I like how you pull the past from the original storyline into this one (clearly written after the movie). Maybe even Skuld will change her feelings for her sister (but not similar to the original story line, don't need her trying to break up the couple). Thanks again and looking forward to the next chapter.
2CyberSpiderHello to both authors,
I had been passing over this story for a while, and now I have finally read it. Other than a few mistakes (Urd being a 'he' - Fated, just after she makes the tea offer to Belldandy, and a few spelling errors), I have very much enjoyed the story. Sorry to find that you killed Megumi even before the story starts (hopefully she returns as a forgiving and healing spirit for Keii and family later), but otherwise I like how you pull the past from the original storyline into this one (clearly written after the movie). Maybe even Skuld will change her feelings for her sister (but not similar to the original story line, don't need her trying to break up the couple). Thanks again and looking forward to the next chapter.
3/27/2013 c7 oldspacecadet3
I'm very glad to see this timeline where Skuld is not interferring with their relationship in any way (as in, not being there), and no meddling from Urd, either.
True, the events leading up to this chapter were necessarily tragic for both parties, yet due to the events, each person was ready to be accepted by the other unconditionally, and actively and physically confirming their feelings for each other, moving their relationship forward at unprecedented speed, much like it sometimes occurs in the real world (our timeline, here and now).
Thank you very much for this great work of fiction (though, on another level of existence, it could be as real as our own.).
I'm very glad to see this timeline where Skuld is not interferring with their relationship in any way (as in, not being there), and no meddling from Urd, either.
True, the events leading up to this chapter were necessarily tragic for both parties, yet due to the events, each person was ready to be accepted by the other unconditionally, and actively and physically confirming their feelings for each other, moving their relationship forward at unprecedented speed, much like it sometimes occurs in the real world (our timeline, here and now).
Thank you very much for this great work of fiction (though, on another level of existence, it could be as real as our own.).
3/27/2013 c1 3COBRASTEVE
Great thru CH 4. I'm a big OMG fan and I hope you continue this story line. Good job on having Bell and Keichi having similar past tragedy.
3COBRASTEVEGreat thru CH 4. I'm a big OMG fan and I hope you continue this story line. Good job on having Bell and Keichi having similar past tragedy.
3/15/2013 c1 Adam
Love the story looking forward to the next chapter
Love the story looking forward to the next chapter
3/12/2013 c7 XxFallingxXxTearsxX
Ooh, Bell seems to have some kind of separation anxiety from him. That will be an interesting little twist!
Wait... He had a dinner break, then came home to eat dinner again? That's kinda strange.
I still think they're showing too much affection for the current stage in their relationship.
I've got too admit. I didn't like the ring scene at all. It's WAY too much like a proposal for my taste.
(The left ring finger is for that purpose, she should have put the ring on the right one instead.)
So Bell was punished before. Interesting to find out what it was. It was obviously something extreme if she has a fear of being alone in the dark.
A date huh? That could be interesting. I wonder who they will run into.
Just a thought here: Is he still in college? It hasn't been mentioned at all yet.
Anyways, fairly good chapter.
Ooh, Bell seems to have some kind of separation anxiety from him. That will be an interesting little twist!
Wait... He had a dinner break, then came home to eat dinner again? That's kinda strange.
I still think they're showing too much affection for the current stage in their relationship.
I've got too admit. I didn't like the ring scene at all. It's WAY too much like a proposal for my taste.
(The left ring finger is for that purpose, she should have put the ring on the right one instead.)
So Bell was punished before. Interesting to find out what it was. It was obviously something extreme if she has a fear of being alone in the dark.
A date huh? That could be interesting. I wonder who they will run into.
Just a thought here: Is he still in college? It hasn't been mentioned at all yet.
Anyways, fairly good chapter.
3/11/2013 c6 XxFallingxXxTearsxX
Hmm... this chapter was alright, Gamera's being too direct still. And the pace just took off for some reason. Why is that? You would've had 3 more chapters with the pace you had before. Try to slow it down a bit okay? And you guys are pushing them together too quickly. While the pre-existing love is there, your still moving them a bit too fast. But nothing to fret over as long as you reel it in.
Hmm... K1 didn't seem to have a AN this time, but then again I didn't really see that 'touch' he has when writing. I only saw Gamera's. Did you do this chapter all by yourself?
Hmm... this chapter was alright, Gamera's being too direct still. And the pace just took off for some reason. Why is that? You would've had 3 more chapters with the pace you had before. Try to slow it down a bit okay? And you guys are pushing them together too quickly. While the pre-existing love is there, your still moving them a bit too fast. But nothing to fret over as long as you reel it in.
Hmm... K1 didn't seem to have a AN this time, but then again I didn't really see that 'touch' he has when writing. I only saw Gamera's. Did you do this chapter all by yourself?
3/11/2013 c5 XxFallingxXxTearsxX
I love how you used their childhood memories to push them closer!
Although I do like what you have done, please tell me that second kiss was in the heat of the moment and they're not gonna be all over each other right away. That would be weird.
This kinda reminds me of Tabula Rasa, But I like the interpretation of them being hurt, and looking for that perfect someone to heal them. Instead of Keiichi being a pompous asshole, and while Bell having a fiery attitude is a cool twist. It conflicts with Keiichi's personality too much.
Anyway, I liked this chapter very much so!
I love how you used their childhood memories to push them closer!
Although I do like what you have done, please tell me that second kiss was in the heat of the moment and they're not gonna be all over each other right away. That would be weird.
This kinda reminds me of Tabula Rasa, But I like the interpretation of them being hurt, and looking for that perfect someone to heal them. Instead of Keiichi being a pompous asshole, and while Bell having a fiery attitude is a cool twist. It conflicts with Keiichi's personality too much.
Anyway, I liked this chapter very much so!
3/11/2013 c4 XxFallingxXxTearsxX
I love the interaction between them in the beginning. It's so cute and fluffy!
I could tell you guys split up the work on the chapter before I even read the end. Gamera has a much more 'Direct' Style of writing, while K1 has a dark tone in his.
Hey Gamera, could you try to make the story flow a tad bit more? Your directness is very noticeable in the dialogue. You jump subjects abruptly and It kinda throws the reader off a bit.
And K1, I love the emotion you put into your writing. You seem to share in my love for the dark and depressing. Go you!
I love the interaction between them in the beginning. It's so cute and fluffy!
I could tell you guys split up the work on the chapter before I even read the end. Gamera has a much more 'Direct' Style of writing, while K1 has a dark tone in his.
Hey Gamera, could you try to make the story flow a tad bit more? Your directness is very noticeable in the dialogue. You jump subjects abruptly and It kinda throws the reader off a bit.
And K1, I love the emotion you put into your writing. You seem to share in my love for the dark and depressing. Go you!
3/11/2013 c3 XxFallingxXxTearsxX
This was an interesting little chapter. I thought Gamera was writing this one? This seems like a 'watered down' version of K1 X Bell's style. I have read Gamera's fic "Beginning". And he writes quite a bit differently than this. Are you trying to write the same way K1 does? I think it would be better if you stuck to your own style instead. Why fix what isn't broken?
On to the good.
I like the wish, it will be interesting to see the spin this puts on the story. Plus it was so cute for him to wish for someone else's happiness. I can see you played that off of Urd's thoughts from last chapter.
I like the little back story on Keiichi, I would like to see what happened to Megumi though.
This was an interesting little chapter. I thought Gamera was writing this one? This seems like a 'watered down' version of K1 X Bell's style. I have read Gamera's fic "Beginning". And he writes quite a bit differently than this. Are you trying to write the same way K1 does? I think it would be better if you stuck to your own style instead. Why fix what isn't broken?
On to the good.
I like the wish, it will be interesting to see the spin this puts on the story. Plus it was so cute for him to wish for someone else's happiness. I can see you played that off of Urd's thoughts from last chapter.
I like the little back story on Keiichi, I would like to see what happened to Megumi though.
