for Reality Shift 2 - Enter The Z Senshi1/13/2003 c4 
4SilveredFoxeh
LOL! (Love the descriptions of the training...and Jason's cool! {he kinda remeinds me of someone named Toby...})
4SilveredFoxehLOL! (Love the descriptions of the training...and Jason's cool! {he kinda remeinds me of someone named Toby...})
4/17/2002 c5 Izumi Ryu
Well, it was interesting. -_-' But strange in a way.
Well, it was interesting. -_-' But strange in a way.
2/11/2002 c5 4ArthurEKing
more than a little raw... but with definate potential... couldn't find the original story, but i figured out what it was from this one. The premise is okay, but a LOT of the specifics are messed up.
For one thing, there's very little theatrical liscense taken... need to describe everything a bit more to make the action flow. get's the reader into the whole world. So basically, as a writer, you need to grow up. not that that's a bad thing. Hey although I never was quite the same, I know people who have been who have become perfectly fine writers.
Take a look at my stuff, and take a look at your own, compare the two, and figure out WHY they are different... WHAT is different about them... and try to take anything good you see in my own style, and make it your own. i may not be the best, but i think you could learn a lot.
anyways, that's about all i have to say for the review of this work, seeing as the only reason i reviewed it was because you reviewed mine, hehehe.
4ArthurEKingmore than a little raw... but with definate potential... couldn't find the original story, but i figured out what it was from this one. The premise is okay, but a LOT of the specifics are messed up.
For one thing, there's very little theatrical liscense taken... need to describe everything a bit more to make the action flow. get's the reader into the whole world. So basically, as a writer, you need to grow up. not that that's a bad thing. Hey although I never was quite the same, I know people who have been who have become perfectly fine writers.
Take a look at my stuff, and take a look at your own, compare the two, and figure out WHY they are different... WHAT is different about them... and try to take anything good you see in my own style, and make it your own. i may not be the best, but i think you could learn a lot.
anyways, that's about all i have to say for the review of this work, seeing as the only reason i reviewed it was because you reviewed mine, hehehe.
2/9/2002 c1 Bigpug
Did you really base these characters off of paople you know? they're Insane,
(but thats okay I like insane characters) good story by the way I like!
Did you really base these characters off of paople you know? they're Insane,
(but thats okay I like insane characters) good story by the way I like!
2/8/2002 c5 2Vincent Wolf
Very good Mike. And I'M the one that thinks of the Fusion Dance? Trippy... great story man.
2Vincent WolfVery good Mike. And I'M the one that thinks of the Fusion Dance? Trippy... great story man.
1/12/2002 c2 Xue Liean
HURRY UP! THIS IS GOOD! :-)
Keep it real!
HURRY UP! THIS IS GOOD! :-)
Keep it real!
1/2/2002 c1 10Anthony Bault
Cool story so far! So...who's going to get THIS house once you leave? *snicker*
10Anthony BaultCool story so far! So...who's going to get THIS house once you leave? *snicker*
