for Glassmaker6/14/2012 c5 wendums
That was a very good red. I do enjoy missing bits even when told by fans. So many of you are very goos writers. Thanks for sharing
That was a very good red. I do enjoy missing bits even when told by fans. So many of you are very goos writers. Thanks for sharing
11/27/2008 c5 
15overtherisingstar
Is this story abandoned? I wonder 'cause I think that would be such a pity. I like the story so far very much, and I would like to read the rest.
Please don't give up on this story!
15overtherisingstarIs this story abandoned? I wonder 'cause I think that would be such a pity. I like the story so far very much, and I would like to read the rest.
Please don't give up on this story!
7/17/2004 c5 18hragaman
Cool! I've never seen anyone else focus on Joran. Nice story, especially when he finnaly met Polgara
18hragamanCool! I've never seen anyone else focus on Joran. Nice story, especially when he finnaly met Polgara
4/2/2004 c4 2mac-c
hey!great fic!I wonder what Jordan will do and if he will find out about the Will and the Word he poseses
2mac-chey!great fic!I wonder what Jordan will do and if he will find out about the Will and the Word he poseses
1/26/2004 c2 5Wren Da'ar
It's interesting. There are a few typos and grammatical errors, but that's fairly typical in any writing. Generally, an editor will help there. Also, your paragraphs and sentences are jumpy. It's sort of hard to follow your line of thought. Remember to write reader-based prose instead of writer-based prose. And are you trying to put everything in the present or past tense? It's kind of jumpy. I like the little prophecy deal you had going on. Those are hard to make up, so good job!
5Wren Da'arIt's interesting. There are a few typos and grammatical errors, but that's fairly typical in any writing. Generally, an editor will help there. Also, your paragraphs and sentences are jumpy. It's sort of hard to follow your line of thought. Remember to write reader-based prose instead of writer-based prose. And are you trying to put everything in the present or past tense? It's kind of jumpy. I like the little prophecy deal you had going on. Those are hard to make up, so good job!
1/11/2004 c2 5Naoko Kensaku
Very promising, but one teensy weenie problem that bugs me:
SPELLING AND STYLE!
They need work. Lots of work.
5Naoko KensakuVery promising, but one teensy weenie problem that bugs me:
SPELLING AND STYLE!
They need work. Lots of work.
